Sunday, May 30, 2010

** Saturday Centus - Week 4 **

Welcome to the fourth week of Saturday Centus. ** Although this is the 4th Week, this is my first time to participate. **

This is a themed writing meme.

Each Saturday Jenny Matlock will be giving a new "prompt" for the week and you have the entire week to link your work to the meme and you can link more than one story if you like.

Each linked essay must be 100 words or less, not including the "prompt" words. No pictures should be used. No profanity. The prompt words can be used in any place within your story but must be left intact.

Please display link button or just a hyper-link back to Saturday Centus. Be careful to link your SC URL to the Linky and not just link to your main blog.

Jenny would suggest that since these are so short, if you can't think of a title just use your blog name as the title in the Linky.

Jenny also says it would be great if you would try and visit the rest of the links. Actually, it will be fun for you because they were wonderful last week for sure!

WEEK 4 PROMPT
“May I help you, miss? You look puzzled.”
“Mmmm… thank you, I’m just looking for my father. We came in together a moment ago, but he seems to have wandered off.”

This link will be live until next Saturday morning around 7 am. And please, remember to link to your SC URL...not your main blog.

Okay.....here's my attempt at this, coming in at 99 words!

“May I help you, miss? You look puzzled.”

“Mmmm… thank you, I’m just looking for my father. We came in together a moment ago, but he seems to have wandered off.”

Darn that father of mine! How was I supposed to know it wasn't safe taking him anywhere. How did I get myself into this? We'd barely spoken in decades and then, out of nowhere, he wants to come and visit?!

I stroll up and down the aisles, my eyes darting in all directions. As minutes tick by, my anger changes to uneasiness, then to alarm. Where is he?

I hear commotion in the biography and memoir aisle. My heart breaks as I see my father slumped on the floor, grasping my memoir, with pride in his tearful, dying eyes.

27 comments:

  1. Wow, this was excellent. It makes me want to know the whole back story between these two. Great job.

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  2. Thank you very much, Viki! I really appreciate your comments. I hardly ever write fiction, and that's why I enjoy these memes...short and sweet...and helps me realize that I CAN write fiction, sometimes!

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  3. This sounds like fun, but I am not sure I understand this part:
    "Be careful to link your SC URL to the Linky and not just link to your main blog." What is a Linky?

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  4. oh so touching. her memoir...his dying eyes...nice!

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  5. It was GREAT, but sad too. Very emotional. sandie

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  6. Hi Bookie! Thanks, and I've already answered your questions in an e-mail.

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  7. Hi Terra! Thank you so much! I still have to get back to Jenny's blog and read everyone's story. I'll definitely leave you a comment, too!

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  8. Hi Chatty/Sandie! Thanks, my dear!

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  9. I enjoyed the surprise at the end! Good work!!

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  10. very touching. it gets to the heart. have a good day. rose

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  11. Becky, congratulations on an amazing debut! I loved it!

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  12. Hi PJ! Thanks very much! Glad you liked it.

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  13. Hi Rose! Thank you! You're always so sweet with your comments!

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  14. Hi Tom! Wow! Thanks! What a wonderful compliment. I think I'll copy and paste, enlarge it and post it on my bulletin board! And if I haven't already thanked you for being a new follower, Thank You!

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  15. Very clever, Becky! Nice job. :D

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  16. Wow! This was powerful. Please keep showing up?

    (The link I followed took me to your main blog. Maybe Jenny can help you fix that if you want. I didn't mind reading your earlier post, just wanted you to know in case it matters to you.)

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  17. Hi Cheryl! Thank you very much! I really appreciate the compliments coming from those of you that have been participating in this longer than I have! :)
    And thanks for the link info! I e-mailed Jenny, per your suggestion, because I understand what you're saying, but I don't know how to fix it on her blog! Thanks again!

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  18. wow wasn't expecting that ending

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  19. Becky, I fixed the link.

    When you do this next week (which you better because you are amazing) just click on the title of your posted story, cut the URL, and then paste it into the bottom box of the linky. This is what I pasted in: http://beckypovich.blogspot.com/2010/05/saturday-centus-week-4.html

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  20. OK, now I'm back. I didn't want to have my instructional part minimize my complimentary part.

    Becky!

    Wow!

    This is soooooo good!

    Wow!

    I loved it...what a really, really cool twist.

    You can totally write fiction, girl!

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  21. Hello "Me"! That's a cute name!! Thanks so much for stopping and leaving a comment! Please come back any time!

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  22. Hey Jenny! WOW! Thank you SO MUCH for your compliments!! I totally enjoy doing these small-word-count-fiction-thingys!! I'll be back next week, for sure!!
    And thanks again for helping me with the linky-thingy too! :D

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  23. Excellent story, would love to read more about their history. Love the sense of panic that you convey in the short passage where she is looking for her father. Really nicely done! Kathy

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  24. Another story set in a book store! I love the way you took us through your anger to genuine concern. And your father on the floor clutching your memoir - very smart and clean ending.

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  25. Hello , I like your take on this prompt . It made sense to me :)

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  26. Thank you Kathy, Claudia and Jackie! I appreciate your comments very much!

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